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From Research to Revision, Ick! Part 6

On Wednesdays this fall, I’m
sharing the process of creating my recently-published book
Ick! Delightfully
Disgusting Animals Dinners, Dwellings, and Defenses
step-by-step (To learn about the whole process in one sitting or to share an age-appropriate version with your students, check out this new resource on my website.)


Last week I started to discuss the drafting
process by sharing a technique that nonfiction writers can use to find a focus.
You can scroll down and read that post. 



Today, I’ll pick up where I
left off.



Once I found a focus and did
some additional research to gather more specific information about
Lepidodexia bufonivora, the flesh fly larvae that live inside and feed
on toads,
I started thinking about creative ways to share this
information with my readers. I went back to my notebook and made a few more
notes:

First, I realized that I might be able to
infuse humor into my writing by incorporating the word “croak,” which has a
double meaning. Then I noticed the words “the end” and thought that perhaps I
could use a narrative writing style.



As I continued brainstorming, I started to make personal
connections:



The
idea of sharing the information as a story made me think about helping my niece
write a fractured fairytale for school. Maybe I could write a sort of twisted
tale about the flesh fly.



As
I re-read my notes, the word “surprised” made me think of the party I had
recently planned for my husband. Maybe the surprising nature of the fly-toad
relationship should be the central idea of the piece.



Because
I’d come up with two different ways to approach the text, and I liked them
both, I decided to create two different versions and then figure out which one
I liked better. 



Version 1: A Toad-al Surprise

Think
you know what happens when a fly and a toad cross paths? Then get ready for a
BIG surprise! 



When
a female flesh fly encounters a harlequin toad, she doesn’t become lunch.
Instead, she darts down and deposits her newly-hatched maggots on the toad’s skin.



What
happens next? The white, wormy youngsters get to work, burrowing into the
toad’s body. Then the maggots devour their victim from the inside out. 



That’s
right. In this scenario, it’s the toad that croaks.

Version 2: The Fly and the Toad
Once
upon a time, there was a fly and a toad. Think you know how this story ends?
Think again.



In
this twisted tale, a female flesh fly deposits her newly-hatched larvae on a
harlequin toad’s skin. The white, wormy youngsters wriggle and squirm as they
burrow into the toad’s body. Then the maggots devour their victim from the
inside out. 



The
end. 



Actually,
it’s the end for the toad, but not for the larvae. With their bellies full, the
maggots turn into pupae. And a few weeks after that, they emerge as adults.



If
you look closely at these two versions, you can see how they connect to the
ideas I explored in my writer’s notebook. You’ll also notice that some phrases
appear in both pieces. That’s because they present facts that came from my
research.



Because
I took the time to find a focus and make personal connections, I was able to
create two pieces that are different from each other and different from the way
another writer would describe the fly-toad relationship. Not only does this
method for evaluating and synthesizing research work for students as well as
professional writers, it also makes the writing more vibrant and interesting.
AND it helps writers avoid any possibility of plagiarism. 



So which version did I
end up using in my book?
The
section about flesh flies on pages 68-69 is quite similar to Version 1. 






But
if you turn to the section about bombardier beetles, you’ll see some
similarities to Version 2. 
For example, the main text begins: “Once upon a time, there was a
beetle and a toad.” 
And the second paragraph says: “Think that’s the end of this true
tale? Then you’re in for a surprise.” 


So, in a way, I ended up using them both.



The flesh fly text didn’t
change all that much during the revision process, but some sections did. I’ll
talk more about that next week.

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